The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
The graph illustrates the difference in the rate at which Gold was sold in Dubai in the year 2003 from January to December. It was measured in millions of Dirhams.
Overall
, the highest sales
was
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made in March
while
the lowest
was
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were
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made in July and September.
However
, It is seen that there was fluctuation across the year. In January,
200millions
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200 million dollars
of Dirham
was
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sold, it
however
sharply increased to exactly
350milllion
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350 million
in March before it dramatically declined to
same
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amount sold in January. There was a gradual decrement from slightly above 150million Dirham to almost 120million in July.
Furthermore
, there was a sharp increment of roughly
80million
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80 million
followed by a reduction of the same amount in September,
that is
,
80milllion
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80 million
. The sales continued to increase steadily for the
last
three consecutive years from about
180milllion
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180 million
in October to almost
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a 200million
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200million
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200 million
in December.
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