The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the difference in the rate at which Gold was sold in Dubai in the year 2003 from January to December. It was measured in millions of Dirhams.

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, the highest sales

was

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made in March

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the lowest

was

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made in July and September.

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, It is seen that there was fluctuation across the year. In January,

200millions

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200 million dollars

of Dirham

was

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sold, it

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sharply increased to exactly

350milllion

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350 million

in March before it dramatically declined to

same

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the same

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amount sold in January. There was a gradual decrement from slightly above 150million Dirham to almost 120million in July.

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, there was a sharp increment of roughly

80million

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80 million

followed by a reduction of the same amount in September,

that is

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80milllion

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80 million

. The sales continued to increase steadily for the

last

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three consecutive years from about

180milllion

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180 million

in October to almost

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a 200million

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200million

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200 million

in December.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

143 words

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