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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the amount of
gold
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 sales in Dubai during the
year
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.
Overall
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, it could be seen that the peak of
gold
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 trading was in
March
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. To begin with, at the start of the
year
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 sales were approximately 200
million
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Dirhams
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 and
then
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, within 2 months, the numbers reached the prime degree of realisation and raised roughly 150
million
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 cash.To put it in more precise terms, for every month, there were 200
million
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Dirhams
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 from
gold
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 in January; 225
million
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Dirhams
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 from
gold
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 in February; and 350
million
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Dirhams
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 from
gold
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 in
March
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. Interestingly, after aggressive growth until
March
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, the sales met an unavoidable drop of approximately 225
million
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dirhams
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 between
March
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 and July.
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, after the month of August, the number is back to over 200
million
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 again, like at the start of the
year
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.It
then
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 fluctuated over the
last
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 4 months of the
year
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 and ended the period slightly lower than where it began, at roughly 5
million
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dirhams
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gold, year, march, million, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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