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A resturant near your house is making a lot of noise. You called the manger but no action was taken. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: *Introduce yourself *Describe the problems you are facing because of this *suggest solutions

#resturant #house #noise #manger #action #manager #*introduce #*describe #*suggest
Dear Mr Andrew, First of all, let me introduce myself. My name is Dini, someone who lived
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 Senayan
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, around your restaurant.
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this
 time, I have been
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 about the noise from your place over the night. I already called but
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 not get any
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. I think you should understand
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 because I am a mom of 7 cats. So, my cats did not sleep all night long. I think
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 you should remind
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 about the noise. Maybe you can use noise cancellation or something like that. I hope you understand. Best regards, Dini
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task response
Provide a more detailed description of the problems you are facing and how it is impacting your daily life.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal and appropriate greeting and closing for a letter to a manager.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and more formal language to improve the overall lexial resource.
grammatical range
Use more complex sentence structures and pay attention to subject-verb agreement and punctuation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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