Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Today, many
students
intend to participate in subjects
that are not related to their major in University. Although
there is an opponent idea that they should merely focus on their field of study and gain one qualification. Despite Correct word choice
However
this
controversy, I believe that being
multitasking is more beneficial in both life and career. In Unnecessary verb
apply
this
essay
I will discuss both views and express my opinion either.
Nowadays, many youngsters are interested in learning alternative skills and Add a comma
essay,
improve
their knowledge in different tasks since Wrong verb form
improving
recently
being Rephrase
apply
master
in only one major is not enough. Correct article usage
a master
For example
, most of
companies are willing to hire a candidate who stands out and can function more efficiently and is able to manage Change preposition
apply
variety
of tasks simultaneously. Add an article
a variety
Moreover
, the students
can broaden their horizon
by taking practical lessons. Fix the agreement mistake
horizons
Thus
, they have more ability to deal with new difficulties that could be faced in the future. Besides
, people with extra information can take part in distinctive communities and flourish their communication skills which is a very useful capability.
On the other hand
, due to
opposite
notion, some Correct article usage
the opposite
students
might be more engaged with additional classes and losing
their golden time to obtain the necessary qualification through their major and Wrong verb form
lose
does
not have the adequate understanding to find an appropriate job. In Correct subject-verb agreement
do
this
case, it is not only beneficial but also
is wasting
Replace the word
waste
time
. Change preposition
of time
For instance
, when students
who studying
sciences Wrong verb form
study
such
as medicine focus on additional subjects
more, they probably losing
time to study for their exams or Wrong verb form
lose
improving
their education for Wrong verb form
improve
further
jobs. Consequencely
, they will fail or in the worst case scenario, they will be a doctor with Correct your spelling
Consequently
least
competency Correct article usage
the least
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
put
Wrong verb form
puts
patient's
life Correct article usage
the patient's
in
risk.
Change preposition
at
To sum up
, both visions are considerable and the best suggestion might be making
Change the verb form
to make
balance
to take advantage Correct article usage
a balance
from
every new activity that you want to be instructedChange preposition
of
.
There should be a limit that nobody exceeded. Change preposition
in.
Finally
, in my side of view, learning about other subjects
in addition
to main
Correct article usage
the main
subjects
, will have merits that can overcome drawbacks.Submitted by reihanetorfe on
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