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Describe a bad service you received in a restaurant.

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Today, I would like to share an unforgettable experience about a bad service. If my memory serves me right, a couple of weeks ago, I and my bestie decided to go to a local new restaurant to taste Thailand cuisine, cue we are food lovers. So we made a reservation in advance to avoid some waiting things.
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 as staying in a long queen. when that day arrived, we went there on time, but unfortunately, a writer told us that our table was served to other customers, so we needed to wait approximately 30 minutes. Honestly, at
first,
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I forgave the waiter's mistake, since
this
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 guy is a new staff and making mistakes is a normal thing. But
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 guy
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 not appreciate our kindness, he continued to show rude behavior.
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, he made a fuss about our books. So his behavior drove me
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nuts. In the end, I found his manager, fortunately, she said sorry to us and gave us a great discount on our that
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 bill. So we had to forgive
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 guy's rude service. For us, that definitely was a terrible experience in our life.
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