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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
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The bar chart depicts the weekly
hours
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 spent by married
men
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 and
women
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 on chores
work
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. There are
three
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 different categories of people, the ones without
children
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, with one or two
children
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 or with more than
three
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.
Overall
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, married
women
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 are the ones who spend more time doing unpaid
work
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such
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 as childcare, gardening or housework.
Women
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 who have more
children
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work
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 more
hours
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 than those who don't have any. Meanwhile,
men
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 spend around the same amount of time on
such
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 chores with some variation in case of more
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then
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than
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three
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children
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. In a child-free household or in one with no more than two,
men
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 spend less than 20
hours
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 per week on unpaid
work
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. Surprisingly, the
hours
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decrese
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decrease
 for
men
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 who have more than
three
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 kids. In
this
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 case,
the
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they
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 spend just over 15
hours
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 weekly on
such
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 chores.
On the contrary
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,
this
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 number is always higher for
women
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 who spend around 30
hours
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 per week working in the house even when they have no kids.
This
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 number rises to over 50
hours
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 in a 1 to 2
children
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 household and jumps to 60 when there are more than
three
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children
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 in the house.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, men, women, work, three, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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