The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country.
The line chart illustrates the ratio of five different
age
group
of cinema Fix the agreement mistake
groups
vistors
in a country. Correct your spelling
visitors
Overall
, the figure of
people at the Change preposition
for
age
of 14-24 was the highest, and the precentages
dropped with Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
age
.
In 1978, 90% of people at
the Change preposition
between
age
from
14 to 24 Change preposition
of
vistied
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visited
cinema
, and the figure kept dropping as Correct article usage
the cinema
age
increased and hit its lowest at the Correct article usage
the age
age
group
of more then
50 years old which was about 40%. In 1988, the percentages reached the lowest in all Replace the word
than
age
group
which were about 75%, 60%, 40% and 21% in the order of youngest Fix the agreement mistake
groups
age
group
to the oldest. The figures rebounded in all age
group
in 1998 which were 90%, 70%, 61% and 40% from the youngest Fix the agreement mistake
groups
age
group
to the oldest, and the figures kept
approximately the same in 2003. Verb problem
remained
Lastly
, the figure decreased in age
groups of 14-24, 25-34, and 25-49 in 2008, however
, the percentage increased at the age
group
of 50 years old or older.Submitted by papaya on
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