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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts provide information about how much
water
 is being used for different purposes
such
 as industrial, agricultural and domestic in percentage.
These information
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involve
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 six different places in the world. At
the
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first glance, it can be clearly seen that Europe
,
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 and North America have the most consumption of
water
 for industrial use. As is observed, agricultural use has the most portion of
water
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the water
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 used in
other
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the other
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 four areas. Among these four areas, Central
Asia
 agriculture involves
the
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88% of
water
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the water
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 used which is the highest percentage among
four
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the four
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 other countries.
Besides
, the portion of
water
 used
in domestic
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 in Central
Asia
 is equal to South East
Asia
 which is 7%.
On the other hand
, Central
Asia
 has the lowest amount of
water
 used in industry which is 5%.
Also
, the highest rank of
water
 used
in domestic
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 belongs to South America. The interesting point is that Europe has the lowest rank of
water
 used in agriculture which is 3296.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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