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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
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The bar graph illustrates information about married
men
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 and
women
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 unpaid done throughout the week
such
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 as household chores, and taking care of their family. At first glance, it could
be consider
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be considered
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 that the highest work was done by married
women
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 with three
children
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,
while
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 the number of kids does not
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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married
men
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.
To begin
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 with,
women
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 without
children
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was
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apply
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having house
chore
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chores
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 and they were able to save some of their
hours
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 which was 30. Once they have
children
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 is significant growth in work
hours
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 they have to provide time for childcare and reach around 51.
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,the highest time spent by the married
women
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 with 3
children
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 was 60 and outweighed by the other two families. In comparison, of married
women
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, married
men
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 spent fewer
hours
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 in household work around 19 and showed no fluctuation and remained steady. Surprisingly, the lowest
hours
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is
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are
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 allocated to
men
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 with three
children
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, which is about 17
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, children, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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