The charts below show the percentage of water u sed for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selectin

The charts below show the percentage of water u sed for different purposes in 

six areas of the world. 

Summarise the information by selectin
The given pie chart illustrates the
percentage
of
water
used in different six areas of the world. Almost the pie chart
shown
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shows
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that
water
used for domestic
purposes
got the lowest
percentage
, and most largest
percentage
was for agricultural
purposes
, like in Central
Asia
, South East
Asia
, Africa and South
America
. Central
Asia
has the greatest
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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percentage
which
was
Wrong verb form
is
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88%. It’s very different in Europe, they used more
water
for industrial
purposes
than for agriculture
by
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with
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53%. If we look
on
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at
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Africa, they got 84% of agricultural
water
purposes
that’s
Verb problem
which
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mean
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means
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Africa was in second place after Central
Asia
.
Then
we check for
America
, between North and South have the different
percentage
Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
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. South
America
has 71% for agricultural
use
and just 10% for industrial
use
,
while
North
America
just
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has just
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39%
of
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for
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agicultural
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agricultural
use
and 48%
fot
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for
industrial
use
.
Overall
, the majority of
water
use
was for agricultural
purposes
.
However
, for continents
were
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apply
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containing developed
counties
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countries
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like Europe and North
America
the
water
uses
Wrong verb form
is used
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more for Industrial
purposes
.
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