The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

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women

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's birth rates in England between 1973 and 2020.

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women

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aged 20 to 25 have

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decreasing trend,

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childbirth rates of those who are 28 to 34 years old have increased by the end of the period.

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, females who are under 20 and over 40, show similar statistics that only slightly changed during the years.

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, in 1973, it was quite popular to give birth

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aged 20 to 25, at 120000

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, going down to 80000 in 1993 and eventually to just under 20000 in 2008. After that, the number had

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dropped to 20000, representing the same number as for

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who are under 20 by 2020.

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the figure for those who were 28 to 34 was just 20(in 1973) leaping to around 45, finilising at 80 in 2020.

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, for those who were aged 40, delivering children was not a popular procedure, starting with about 150000 in 1973

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lowering to slightly above zero in 2020.

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, in 1973, only 20000 females who

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under 20 experienced childbirth (accounting for the same number as for those who were 28 to 34 years old) declining to just under 20 in 2001, and moving back to 20 in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

212 words

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The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

ou are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager. - What the problem is - How you feel about the problem - What steps you want the manager to take

Some people claim that public transport should be free of charge, while others disagree. Do the advantages of free public transport outweigh the disadvantages?

It might be said that protecting the environment is the most important challenge facing governments today. How important do you feel this issue is? Are there other challenges which are of equal or greater importance?

Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?