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Many employers are employing people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. Do you agree or did agree that good social skills are as important as a good qualification to succeed in jobs

#employers #people #skills #qualifications #qualification #jobs
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There is no doubt that these days
surely
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we should
on
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employers
employing
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they show
people
 they have
experience
 and multiple
skills
 in a job . The question is, are the
skills
 required for employees at
work
 or not, or is a good qualified
person
 sufficient ? In
this
 essay , I am going to
clarifying
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 ideas and what is most appropriate . To be honest I believe
the
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skills
it's
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are
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 important to show your worth at
work
 because a
person
 who has many
skills
 and
experience
 is more likely to compete for employment seats ,
likewise
 when you have
experience
 and social
skills
 it makes it easy for you to chew communication with reviewers it makes you a good
person
 to meet
people
 and not be timed to appear in front of
people
 .
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in
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positive
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side
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 most job
centers
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 need someone with high
experience
 and social communication
skills
 , actually a
person
 who has
many
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 adeptness
it
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makes the
work
 easy and you don't have to worry about it .The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that request
this
 period . To illustrate , what motivates me or the company to hire someone who has no
experience
 or
skills
?
This
 causes
burden
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 on
work
 .
In other
words
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Skills
 it's important . In conclusion ,
although
 Not
accepting
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 the party that says skill and
experience
 are not important and that they do not develop from the
work
 itself. The team that wants it believes that someone who has high
experience
 and good competence and who has social
skills
 should be employed
Therefore
, I believe that
must
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most
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on
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employers are employing
people
 with good social
skills
 .
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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