The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
The diagram illustrates the proportion of physical activity that both
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and
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in Australia had been doing routinely by different
age
groups in 2010.
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, men's
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activity
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from the time they were 15 to the time they turned 54,
while
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from when they
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45 to over 65. In most
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intervals,
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were reported to be more active compared to
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females
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. Before becoming
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middle aged
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,
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physical activity that ladies had in
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Australia
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from one
age
group to another
also
the difference between
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and
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females
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had the same approach. They had 52.8, 42.2, and 39.8
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contribution in
age
ranges 15 to 24, 25 to 34, and 35 to 44 respectively. Adult men
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ages between 45 to 54 were in their most active status
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shared 53.3% of
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and their least
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activity
period referred to the time they were 65 years old or more, that least diversity between both genders was simultaneously presented to be in
this
interval as well, which was 47.1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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