You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work experience. In your letter. - thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience - explain what you hope to learn from the work experience - ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do

Dear sir; I am writing to express my appreciation to offers
such
an opportunity for me to
doing
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this
work experience. hoping during
this
period to learn innovative methods for
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the
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productivity and
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a high limit of efficiency which, will reflect on my career,
s
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resumes.
In addition
, expanded my Professional networking since
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to multiple colleagues and clients.
Moreover
,
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new experiences from the manager and the employer On how
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and handle the organisation properly.
Finally
,I would ask you
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some questions related to
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of starting work experience and
also
the kind of tasks that would
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it. and if I have more questions and issues to clarify I will send you an email.
Thanksfull
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opportunity. Faithfully yours.
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coherence cohesion
The logical structure could be significantly improved by organizing ideas more effectively and creating clear, distinct paragraphs. Focus on a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
Ensure the tone is consistent and appropriate throughout the letter. Consider a more formal and polite tone when addressing the manager and avoid informal expressions.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are not appropriately formal for a letter to a manager. Use 'Dear [Manager's Name]' to start and 'Yours faithfully' or 'Yours sincerely' to close the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or query, ensuring that the letter is easy to follow and understand.
task achievement
The response to the task can be improved by directly addressing all the bullet point and elaborating on them with specific details and examples.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • appreciative
  • hands-on experience
  • skill enhancement
  • networking opportunities
  • mentorship
  • organisational structure
  • company ethos
  • onboarding process
  • professional development
  • collaborative environment
  • shadowing
  • logistics
  • corporate attire
  • reporting hierarchy
  • team dynamics
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