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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card

#minutes #student #identification #card #director #services #situation #request
Dear Sir /Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I am an accounting
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student
stuednt
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student
 at your
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college
colleague
colleage
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college
 I lost my identification card and
this
 current situation influenced me significantly. I am fully aware
this
 situation is going to take right action and lots of steps the main effect of
this
 problem is I could not get
pass
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a pass
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 at the
colleage
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college
 the security
asks
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asked
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 me where is your ID card I told him many times I
wrote
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had written
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 a letter to
dierctor
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director
 of student
servide
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service
services
 and there is
not
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no
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 response yet
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therefore
 I am writing again to you to
make
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 action badly
moreover
, I can not get to university library it is critical to me for
studing
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studying
 throughout
night
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the night
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 as you know these days is
mid-term
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a mid-term
the mid-term
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 test I need study at
library
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the library
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this
 week. I
hop
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hope
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understanding
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 my situation to arrange
new
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a new
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 ID card , I request you to issue a new identification
earliest
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as soon as
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 possible if you need more details regarding
this
 problem please contact me. Kind regards, Sarah
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea. The letter currently has ideas that are not clearly separated into distinct paragraphs.
greeting and closing
Use a more appropriate greeting and closing phrases; 'Dear Director of Student Services,' and 'Sincerely,' or 'Yours faithfully,' may be more suitable.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task, which includes not only explaining the problem but also providing necessary details such as your name, department, and potential proof of identity for the new card.
suitable writing tone
Use a tone appropriate for formal communication. Avoid colloquial expressions and use complete sentences with proper punctuation.

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