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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself •explain what experience and special skills you have •explain why you are interested in the job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing in reference to the advertised position of a shopkeeper in the City Museum during the holidays. My name is Vicky. I am doing a Bachelor of Economy at King's College. Currently, I am working in a fashion store as a marketing staff. During my time in college, I was a volunteer in city tourism where I guided foreigners to visit the architecture and historical buildings inside the town. I believe that my job
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 with the advertised position because my experience is very involved in business. If you need any
further
 information about me, please email me at the address
that is
 attached to my CV letter. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you for your time and your consideration. Yours faithfully, Vicky
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a clear main idea with supporting details; some paragraphs lack specificity in terms of experience and special skills.
task achievement
Expand upon your experiences and skills, providing more detailed examples relevant to the job applied for.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively to aid the reader in following your arguments.
task achievement
Maintain an appropriately formal tone throughout the letter, avoiding colloquial language.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Director,
  • enthusiastic applicant
  • pursuing a degree in
  • customer service experience
  • volunteer work
  • multilingual
  • cash handling
  • POS systems
  • team player
  • punctual
  • excellent communicator
  • cultural enthusiast
  • part-time position
  • professional references available
  • at your earliest convenience
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