The diagrams show total global population between 1900 and 2000, and its proportions according to region.

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the line graph illustrates

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the total

whole

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population

from 1900 to 2000 and its percentages

according to

region.

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, the

gobal

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global

population

increased between 1900 to 2000,

however

, there

are

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experienced

decreasing

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a decrease

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1930 and 1950.

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in 1900, the total

population

was around 1.5

billions

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with experienced

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slighty

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slight

slightly

increase up to 2

billions

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in 1920. which is as same as the

number of

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population

in 1940 and approximately 2 billion in 1960 , though in 1930 and 1940 experienced

decrease

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to 1

billions

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billion

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1950 until 2000, the global

population

experienced

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a sharply

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sharply

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increase from 1

billions

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to 6

billions

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. The increase was 6 times

compare

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1900 from 2000.

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