As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. Do you agree or disagree?

A large number of species are whipping out every year, and
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Earth's ecosystem in a way that has never
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before.
Although
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many humans are in a delicate situation;
however
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the
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one
delve
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into
this
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in
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a broad
prospective
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comes
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to the understanding,
which
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all species are connected to each other in our ecosystem, similar to a chain, and extinction of some can endanger others. The wolves are hunted by lions,
whereas
they hunt sheep
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wolves
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wolves are
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extinct, there
would
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be no food for lions, and sheep will clear all the grass
exists
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, which can cause a dusty storm. So the protection of animals has a chain of benefits, not only in
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of humans but
also
other species.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure the introduction and conclusion are clear and distinct, encapsulating the main argument and summarizing the key points made in the essay respectively. Avoid blending the conclusion into the body paragraphs.
Logical Structure
Develop a more structured logical flow to connect ideas and paragraphs together. Use cohesive devices and transition words to enhance the clarity of the argument.
Task Response
Focus on fully responding to the task by addressing all parts of the prompt. If the question requires an opinion, state your position clearly and provide a balanced argument with supporting details.
Specific Examples
Include more relevant, specific examples to support your points. Personal anecdotes, data, or citations from credible sources can greatly strengthen the effectiveness of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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