the pie charts show the electricity generated in germany and france from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. summarize the information and make comparison.write at least 150 words

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These histograms manifest the

Eectricity

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Electricity

generated in

Germany

and

France

. These histograms are divided into 2 parts for each country. One

for

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all types of electricity used in the country and the other is for the renewables used by the people in the

countries

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country

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. These

datas

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data

are extracted from the year 2009 for both

the

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countries.

Germany

used 560 billion K Wh

whereas

France

consumes

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510 billion K Wh

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that year. The

conventioanal

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conventional

thermal used by

Germany

takes 3/4th of the pie chart. The Newclear energy takes

the

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second place which has

the

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percentage of 23.0. The

least

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last

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resource used by the citizens is

the

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renewables

that

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which

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17.4%. As a whole in

Germany

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Germany,

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conventional thermal played a

crutial

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crucial

critical

. When it comes to

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renewable resources biomass has a growth of 39.3% ,

wind

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the wind

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takes

the

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second place with 36.9% and the least is

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solar energy with 6.1%.

France

had a

tremondous

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tremendous

use of nuclear in 2009 for about 76.0%.

Similary

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Similarly

the conventional source has a 3%

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increase compared to

renewable

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renewables

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. In the next chart of

France

Hydroelectric power has the majority of 80.5%. The wind and biomass

has

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declined compared to

Germany

. The Solar Geoth

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not used in the course of 2009. In

comparison

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comparison,

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the Electricity generated in

France

is less

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than 50

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% than

Germany

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in Germany

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