The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the graph provides information containing the
consumption
of fish and some different meats in Europe between 1979 and 2004. Generally speaking, the trend in chicken consumption
during the periods increased when beef, lamb and fish shows
a decreased movement.
as Correct subject-verb agreement
show
it
presented, in 1979 people in Correct pronoun usage
apply
europe
Change the capitalization
Europe
most
likely to eat beef Rephrase
were more
rather
than Rephrase
apply
the
others, Correct article usage
apply
it's
Correct your spelling
its
consumption
reach
just above 200 Wrong verb form
reached
grams
per week for every person. but it drop
to 100 Wrong verb form
dropped
grams
in 2004. this
similar trend also
happened in lamb consumption
, it began with
150 Change preposition
at
grams
per week and went down to 50 grams
in
the end of Change the preposition
at
period
. Add an article
the period
in contrast
, the chicken consumption
rocketed from below 150 grams
per person per week and reach
the peak in 2004 with 250 Wrong verb form
reached
grams
.
unlike the others, the consumption
of fish in europe
is not as much as Change the capitalization
Europe
the
beef, lamb, and chicken and it Correct article usage
apply
remain
stable from the beginning until the end of the period.Change the verb form
remains
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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