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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the graph provides information containing the
consumption
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 of fish and some different meats in Europe between 1979 and 2004. Generally speaking, the trend in chicken
consumption
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 during the periods increased when beef, lamb and fish
shows
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show
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 a decreased movement. as
it
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apply
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presented, in 1979 people in
europe
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Europe
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most
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were more
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 likely to eat beef
rather
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apply
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than
the
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apply
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others,
it's
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its
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consumption
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reach
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reached
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 just above 200
grams
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 per week for every person. but it
drop
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dropped
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 to 100
grams
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 in 2004.
this
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 similar trend
also
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 happened in lamb
consumption
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, it began
with
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at
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 150
grams
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 per week and went down to 50
grams
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in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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.
in contrast
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, the chicken
consumption
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 rocketed from below 150
grams
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 per person per week and
reach
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reached
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 the peak in 2004 with 250
grams
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. unlike the others, the
consumption
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 of fish in
europe
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Europe
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 is not as much as
the
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apply
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beef, lamb, and chicken and it
remain
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remains
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 stable from the beginning until the end of the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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