Question -Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available

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Dear Mr. Malshan, Thank you for giving me the opportunity to arrange a farewell

party

for our colleague named Maxwell who is leaving us very soon after serving the company as a human resources manager for

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five years in Human Resources Department.

Also

, I am writing

this

letter to inform you about the

overall

plan

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for

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this

party

including

date

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the date

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and time.

Coming

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weekend is a long weekend in November month which is very suitable for arranging

this

retirement

party

for our beloved colleagues with

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outstanding arrangement. I suggest that we can organize

this

program dated on 7th of November at night

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so that all the anticipated employees can be

joining

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with their family members. As a venue, The Peninsula Hotel will be the best place for arranging

this

party

because on

scheduled

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the scheduled

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date

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dates

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they usually have

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a prganized

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prganized

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organized

free "Live Musical Program" for the customers.

One

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the other hand, they offer

best-in-town

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the best-in-town

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buffet dinner facilities

with

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a reasonable prices

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reasonable prices

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and I believe that our colleagues will enjoy

this

farewell

party

with

having

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good food

as well as

live

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a live

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musical program. I would appreciate it if you suggest

anymore

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any more

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idea

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apart from the above plan. Yours faithfully, Faisal

Submitted by faisalmahamood on Sun Nov 19 2023

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph presents a clear single idea, maintain a logical flow and avoid mixing topics within paragraphs.

task achievement

While the response is complete, add more details to support each suggestion and strengthen your recommendations for the party arrangements.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

199 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Question -Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available

Although nowadays people are reading news through internet, newspaper still remain of values. Do you agree or disagree?

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