The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The graph below shows the value of borrowed
books
in four different countries, and the chart shows the types of books
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we have five types of Add a comma
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books
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is: Self-Help, Fiction, History, Science and Biography. The Fiction type is most
popular among Rephrase
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villages
than other types which have 43 percent of borrow. Overall
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Sutton
Wood
remained the biggest number of books
borrowed, with all three villages
spending much less on them
In June Church Mount and West Eaton borrowed the least amount of books
, while
Ryeslip and Sutton
Wood
borrowed about as much as each other. However
, by August, the importance of borrowed books
in Sutton
Wood
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Sutton
Woods which sharply increased had a value of 300
As can be seen from the graph, the amount of borrowed books
increased in all four villages
but Sutton
Wood
saw sharp declines and rises in book values while
others steadily raised the bar, expect
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