The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The graph below shows the value of borrowed
books
in four different countries, and the chart shows the types of
books
At
first
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first,
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we have five types of
books
this
is: Self-Help, Fiction, History, Science and Biography. The Fiction type is
most
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more
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popular among
villages
than other types which have 43 percent of borrow.
Overall
the
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apply
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Sutton
Wood
remained the biggest number of
books
borrowed, with all three
villages
spending much less on them In June Church Mount and West Eaton borrowed the least amount of
books
,
while
Ryeslip and
Sutton
Wood
borrowed about as much as each other.
However
, by August, the importance of borrowed
books
in
Sutton
Wood
has
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had
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fallen sharply and closer to September in those three
villages
amount
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amounting
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compiled about 170-150, when
Sutton
Woods which sharply increased had a value of 300 As can be seen from the graph, the amount of borrowed
books
increased in all four
villages
but
Sutton
Wood
saw sharp declines and rises in book values ​​
while
others steadily raised the bar,
expect
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except
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Ryeslip.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, villages, sutton, wood with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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