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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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Telephones are one of the major methods of communication all over the world. Interaction over telephones
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 people both regionally and internationally. The
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bar graph details the duration of telephone calls by
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United Kingdom users across various categories between the years 1995 to 2002. The bar graph graphically represents three different types of calls: local, national and international and mobiles. The bar graph shows an exponential increase in the usage of mobiles for calls and it shows a gradual increase for national and international calls.
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, the local fixed line displays a slight increase until 1999 and appears to fall gradually from the year 2000.
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