The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.
The two pie charts display the difference in contribution
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per cent of eight industrial sectors which developed
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Turkey's recession in 2000 and 2016. In general, The major
industy
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industry
of
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2000 year was Agriculture, but in 2016 Health and Education became the most developing sector,
while
the minor sector of 2000 and 2016 was Construction
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Finance
& Business
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and business
sectors
raspectively
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respectively
.
To begin
with, the most income
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Turkey
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government in the 2000s was gained from Agriculture Leisure & Hospitality and Education & Business spheres, as the data which was collected
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2000s
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year showed 24%, 17% and 17%, sincerely.
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the least significant economic sectors were Construction (5%), Finance & Business (
also
5%) and Manufacturing (8%). By 2016, analyzing the scheme, it
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noticed that agriculture lost 10% of
income
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and
the
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Health
& Education
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and education
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the most wealthy sector, as its output was 17%
to
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country's
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the country's
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economy.
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