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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant
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The given bar chart provides data on the expenditures of families in one specific country in two years; 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, in 1968 the highest proportion of
family’s
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a family’s
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 weekly
income
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 was allocated to food,
while
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 in 2018 the highest percentage of
income
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 was related to leisure.
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, the expenditures related to the household were the only category that did not experience any in two given years.
According to
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 the bar chart, in 1968 food accounted for nearly 35% of
income
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, which was the maximum amount among other categories, but reduced by 50% in 2018.
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, fuel and power were responsible for a little higher than 5% of
income
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 in 1968,
then
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 dropped slightly and stood at approximately 5
percent
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per cent
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.
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, the trend related to clothing and
footware
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footwear
 was similar to food and decreased from 10% to 5%. Regarding the bar chart, a tripling could be witnessed in expenditure related to leisure, from 7% in 1968 to about 21% in 2018, which was the maximum amount in 2018.
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, expenditures for housing and transport nearly doubled, and reached 18% and 13%, respectively.
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, families spent the same proportion of their
income
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 on household goods, which was about 7% in both years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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