You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
The graphs show a variety of working
adults
Change noun form
adults'
adult's
show examples
activities
and
proportion
Correct article usage
the proportion
show examples
of
time
for each
activity
in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, the main
activities
in both years remained steady the biggest, including working and sleeping groups.
Otherwise
the
percentage
of
"going
Correct article usage
the "going
show examples
out" group decreased dramatically,
while
part of “travel to work” went up. The most obvious trend in the charts is that the working and sleeping
activities
have the biggest part. Despite slightly increasing
time
spent on working
activity
from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008, it is still the main part of pie charts. Decreasing
percentage
Add an article
the percentage
show examples
of
time
for sleeping
activity
doesn’t
changed
Change the verb form
change
show examples
the main trend, and
this
group is still one of the biggest.
On the other hand
, the proportion of ‘going out’
activity
fell a little. It declined by 6% from 1958 to 2008,
Percentage
of
time
for ‘travel to work’ grew slightly from 2 in 1958 to 8 in 2008. To summarise, the proportion of
time
adults
spent
Wrong verb form
spend
show examples
on
variety
Correct article usage
a variety
show examples
activities
Change preposition
of activities
show examples
doesn’t
Verb problem
hasn’t
show examples
changed a lot through the years. The
percentage
of
time
working adults spent on going out and
travel
Wrong verb form
travelling
show examples
to work
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
changed gradually from 1958 to 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, time, activity, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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