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The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the
percentage
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 of college
students
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, aged between 18 and 25 years old, in
Singapore
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,
Malaysia
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,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Thailand from 1961 to 2011.
Overall
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, it is true that the
percentage
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 of
students
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 in
Malaysia
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 and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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have
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has
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 a stable increase during the period shown.
In contrast
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, the figures from
Singapore
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 and Thailand have changed constantly over the 50-year period. In 1961, Thailand had the highest
percentage
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 of young people who went to university, with almost 25% of the population; despite it fell to nearly 20% after ten years.
On the other hand
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, figures from
Singapore
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 and
Malaysia
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 tended to rise:
Singapore
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 had
initially
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 15% but doubled the
percentage
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 in the next decade; and
Malaysia
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 had the lowest number of people who went to university, with approximately 3% and rose to 10% in 1971.
However
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, there remain stable in
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the Philipines
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Philipines
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Philippines
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, with 7% of the
students
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. All these four countries reached their peak in 2011, with their highest
percentage
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 of
students
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.
Malaysia
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 have increased significantly over the period reaching 20% in 2011, and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 have
also
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 risen despite remaining steady in the first decade and after 1991 at 15%. In regard to the other two, have increased and decreased over the 50 years, but both achieved their highest
percentage
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 in 2011, with almost 40%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, singapore, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • higher education
  • trend
  • contrast
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • plateau
  • governmental policies
  • economic situations
  • cultural attitudes
  • education growth
  • correlation
  • historical events
  • political events
  • projection
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