Acacemic- Task 1 The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Acacemic- Task 1

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates what Anthropology degree holders engaged after
competion
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completion
competition
of their degree
while
other
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tabel
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table
displays
revenue
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the revenue
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of anthropologists after five years of work involvement. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that half of graduates are involved in full-time
occupation
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.
Further
, despite the other works, part-time working acquest major portion from the rest of
thers
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others
there
.
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who
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to
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the government sector, earning
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higher than the
other
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others
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.
However
, people who do freelance consultation have significant income.
To begin
with, 52% of graduates
involved
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in full-time
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jobs
.
Part-time
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working crowd is 15%
from
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the total.
Additinally
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Additionally
people who are
doing
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study and continue the job
as
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part-time
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responsible for 5%
while
full-time
master
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degree students are 8%. Unfortunately,
unemployment
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rate is 12% despite the
unkown
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unknown
number
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8%.
According to
the given table, people who are
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government employees
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$100,000+ salaries. Owing to the given data, 80%
freelance
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of freelance
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consultants earn more than $ 75,000.
Moreover
, occupants in private companies obtain
signifivcant
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significantly
low salaries. 45% of private
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income range less than $47,999.
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