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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the figure of Asian populations in percentage and these data include the period from 1970 to 2020.
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 of population in Asian countries for 2030 and 2040.
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, Malaysia stands
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 most dense-populated country
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 the only Asian country whose demographic feature has not
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decreased
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and by 2040 it might
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 its max. The lowest number
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 illustrated by Thailand,
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 not the lowest (18%) An interesting
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 of Indonesia being the
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1970 (in
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 10% only) it has reached more than 40% by
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2020, which is higher than Thailand and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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