The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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pie chart
illurastes
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illustrates
the daily meals of three
types
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of sodium,
saturatedfat
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saturated fat
and added sugars, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much in average percentages.
Generaly
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Generally
speaking, the percentage of dinner
are
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is
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notable
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notably
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highest in
type
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the type
a type
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of sodium and saturated fat,
whereas
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the lowest
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types
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type
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is breakfast in all
types
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. Looking more closely at the figure, we can see that the percentage of dinner is dramaticitly approx half of
total
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the total
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in sodium,
the
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apply
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lunch is followed by
then
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that only 29 per cent,
lowest
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the lowest
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types
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are breakfast and snacks
that
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apply
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only 14 per cent each other. In terms
to
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of
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the type of saturated fat,
their
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there
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are not
big
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a big
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differience
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difference
differences
in
four
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the four
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categroies
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categories
, only 10 per cent between each level.
Last
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but not least, there is
significant
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a significant
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highest percentage of snacks in added sugar, approx 42%.
In
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the other hand, from highest to lowest are 23%, 19% and 16%
in
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for
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dinner, lunch and breakfast
respectly
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respectively
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words types with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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