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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The following pie charts provide data on the percentages of
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energy production in France for the
year
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 1995 and 2005. In an
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coal maintained its leading position within a decade, the proportions for the petro decreased by a significant amount. Examining the details,
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coal production was 29.80 per
cent
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 in 1995,
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 reached 30.93
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, which was the highest among the other segments.
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, the gas had stood at the second place, representing 29.63 and 30.31 per
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 in each year.
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, the shares in the petrol sector plunged by approximately 10
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, accounting for 29.27 and 19. 55 per
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 in 1995 and 2005, respectively. Nuclear energy,
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, surged by roughly 4 per
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, from 6.40 to 10.10 per
cent
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. The proportions for the other energy sources soared from 4.90 to 9.10 per
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, which
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 a high increment.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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