The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in a country in two years
The pie charts compare the different types of energy manufacture in a nation over a period of 10 years (1995-2005).
Overall
, the amount of gas, coal, and petro
produced Correct your spelling
petrol
take
up the highest proportion. Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
While
,
the percentage of nuclear and the other powers Remove the comma
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production
account for slightly small.
In 1995, the
coal Correct article usage
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production
made up the largest proportion, at 29.8% and increased minimally in 2005 took
up around 31% of the total Wrong verb form
taking
the
amount of energy Correct article usage
apply
manufactured
. There was Change the form of the verb
manufacturing
the
small increase in the Correct article usage
a
production
of Gas from 29.3% to more than 30% during the period shown. By contrast
, the figure for the generation of petro was around 30%,
but decreased significantly to around 20% in 2005.
Turning to the remaining powers we can see that, the Remove the comma
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production
of nuclear rised
from 6.4% in 1995 to more than 10% in 10 years later. The figure Correct your spelling
rose
of
other power produced climbed twice times to around 9% over 10 years.Change preposition
for
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