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You have seen advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your latter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear sir My name is Enas ,graduated from a University recently. and I am writing to inform you about my desire to apply for your job on looking after Your kid where I have seen the advertisement in the Australian magazine. I do like to take care of children , especially your child's age since they are flexible and easy to communicate with them.
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, I have learned all the methods of teaching and looking for kids From my older sister who has two kids. So I could review
With
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them
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their homework
on
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 the school classes.
Furthermore
, I would like to invest My free time
while
 in Australia for searching Suitable University to apply for
Master's
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a Master's
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 degree program and explore the country's landmarks and
culture
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 heritage. Hope to accept my application
and
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my
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resume and other documents attached with the letter. Looking forward to your response. Sincerely yours.
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greeting and closing
Ensure you start your letter with a proper greeting, such as 'Dear [Parents' Names]' or 'Dear Host Family,' to establish a polite and personalized tone.
greeting and closing
Finish your letter with an appropriate closing salutation, such as 'Kind regards' or 'Yours faithfully,' followed by your full name.
logical structure
Aim for a natural and smooth flow in your writing by organizing related ideas into clear paragraphs and using cohesive devices to connect them.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on a single point or idea related to the prompt to maintain clarity and organization in your writing.
complete response
Make sure to address all parts of the prompt fully to provide a complete response: explaining your desire for the job, detailing why you're suitable, and stating how you'd use your free time.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a tone that is appropriate for the situation; In formal writing, such as a job application, avoid informal language, use complete sentences, and focus on clear, polite, and professional communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchange
  • Childcare
  • Adaptability
  • Nurturing
  • Pedagogical skills
  • Recreational activities
  • Domestic duties
  • First Aid certified
  • Homework assistance
  • Explore
  • Local customs
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Proactive
  • Enthusiastic
  • Responsible
  • CPR trained
  • Language acquisition
  • Sightseeing
  • Aussie lifestyle
  • Immerse
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