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Writing Task 1 (Pie. The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 39% 19% 48% 13% 71% 53% North America South America Europe Africa 84% 32% 15% Central Asia South East Asia Industrial Use Agricultural Use 100% + Domestic Use

Writing Task 1 (Pie. The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 39% 19% 48% 13% 71% 53% North America South America Europe Africa 84% 32% 15% Central Asia South East Asia Industrial Use Agricultural Use 100% + Domestic Use
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The pie charts compare the differences in the proportion of
water
 consumption for three main purposes in North and South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
.
Overall
, most
water
 is utilized for industrial
purpose
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purposes
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 in North
America
 and Europe, whilst other remaining parts primarily use
water
 for farming.
Moreover
, domestic
water
 is the lowest figure in South East
Asia
. Regarding
to
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apply
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North
America
 and Europe, about
a
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half of
water
 consumption is for industry, accounting for 48% and 53% respectively.
Water
 is catered for
household
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households
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,
however
, is always lower than the others.
In addition
, the amount of
water
 for irrigation in North
America
 triples
this
 counterpart for domestic
purpose
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purposes
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. Most
water
 is used for farming in
remaining
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 areas, with the highest figure (88%) belonging to Central
Asia
.
In addition
,
water
 for
household
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households
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 is usually higher than for industry, ranging from
2
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a 2
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% gap in Africa and Central
Asia
 to
9
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a 9
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% gap in South
America
. In South East
Asia
,
in contrast
, there is
a
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 opposite pattern in
water
 usage, at 12% for industrial
purpose
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 and at 7% for domestic use.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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