The table below shows information and predictons regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries
The table
illustrate
the information and predictions Change the verb form
illustrates
according
the transformation in Add the preposition
according to
percentage
of the elderly demography in Add an article
the percentage
Canada
, Germany, and British in the period given.
Overall
, both countries (Canada
and Germany) was in
the highest Verb problem
had
percentage
of the population
aged 65 and above from 1988 to 2030 instead
of UK
which in the lowest Correct article usage
the UK
percentage
over
Change preposition
from
the
1988 to 2030.
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apply
Canada
has become one of the country
that has increased Change to a plural noun
countries
it’s
age Replace the word
its
population
from 16.32% to 20.67% in 1988 and 2000 respectively. And will be predicted t0
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to
climbed
up 26.35% in 2030. Wrong verb form
climb
While
, the British’s
Change noun form
British
Population
remained steadily from 14.23% to 14.89% in 1988 and 2000 but increased to 20.35% in
three decades laterChange preposition
apply
on
. The most noticeable changes Rephrase
apply
are observe
in Germany, Change the verb form
are observed
which
the Correct word choice
where
percentage
of the elderly population
was onward
direction Add an article
the onward
an onward
in
fivefold rather than Change preposition
apply
Canada
and Change preposition
in Canada
UK
with 20.45%, 25.32%, and 30.42% respectively Correct article usage
the UK
during
1988 until 2030.Change preposition
from
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