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Climate change is a global problem. Some people think that individuals are not responsible for solving this issue, but governments and large corporations are. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, the
world
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 population and
nuture
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nurture
nature
encounter
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 many issues which are mainly the cause of
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climate
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 change. The majority of humans believe that their single action cannot preserve the
world
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 from the upcoming disaster.
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human beings can protect all humanity
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 reducing
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waste and using alternative
energy
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people can take a step as recycling in order to decrease the number of pollution in their vicinity which
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will help directly
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the level of
climate
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 variations in the
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 . A person can throw the items into the recycling bins for the reproduction.
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, unfortunately, many prefer to drop down their waste on the streets,
forests
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 without
awaring
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knowing
 the possible dangers. To give an example, a big fire had
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due to
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 people's waste in the forest and
admitedly
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admittedly
,
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 the
climate
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.
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, an increment
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 the use of renewable
energy
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 by individuals has
an
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dramatical
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 positive effect as a remedy for
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climate
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 change. Every year, the consumption of
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fossil fuels as
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energy
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 causes
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a surging
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 of the
carbon-dioxide
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carbon dioxide
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 level in the atmosphere.
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, a recent study
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Marmara University states that turning to
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alternative
energy
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sources
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 may influence the global warming degree in a good way and the professors of the university allure all humanity to be
vulnarable
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vulnerable
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people from all countries and all
governents
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governments
 have
conserns
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concerns
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futures
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 of
climate
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. Some groups argue that they do not have any power to overcome
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 problem ,
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i
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 would argue that all of us can
something
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 for
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nature and the breathtaking views of the
world
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 through changing our habits, including the reproduction of items and using renewable
energy
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sources
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A clear position throughout the response is moderately maintained. Ensure that your opinion is clear and consistent throughout the essay. Stick to a single point of view unless comparing different views, and make sure it is evident in both the introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
The essay lacks precise central ideas and may benefit from a stronger thesis statement. Work on crafting clearer topic sentences and ensuring that each paragraph contains one main idea that's thoroughly explained and supported.
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Instances provided are relevant to the argument, but the examples could be further elaborated to strengthen the argument. Citing studies is beneficial, yet it would be improved by adding statistics or specific findings to substantiate the claims.
coherence cohesion
The essay's structure is discernible but could be enhanced for better readability. Improve the logical flow of ideas by using cohesive devices and clear transitions between paragraphs and within them.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present, but they lack impact. Work on making your thesis statement clearer in the introduction and restate your main points more effectively in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The main points are present, yet need more development and linking back to the main argument. Expand on the main points by providing more detailed explanations and seamless connections to the overall thesis.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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