The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates several number
changed
for the people that born in Australia and other countries and Wrong verb form
changes
resident
in urban, rural and Fix the agreement mistake
residents
town
in 1995 and 2010.
It is obvious that Fix the agreement mistake
towns
living
in the cities had the highest percentage in both years, and Correct pronoun usage
those living
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
born
in foreign countries and lived in rural areas and towns decreased in 2010, Add a missing verb
were born
however
, the former was more dramatic.
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Firstly
, the ratio of people who lived in the cities and who Linking Words
born
outside and in Australia Add a missing verb
were born
were
60 and 50% respectively in 1995, the former remained constant and the latter slightly dropped to 50% after 15 years.
Change the verb form
was
Secondly
, those who Linking Words
born
outside of Australia and lived in rural areas took 40% of the society in 1995, Add a missing verb
were born
nevertheless
, it lowered to one-fourth of the percentage which became less than 10% 15 years ago. Linking Words
In addition
, the ratio diminished mildly from about 18% to 10%.Linking Words
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