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You recently went on holiday with your family to an island resort. Upon your return home, you discovered that you had forgotten a very valuable item there. Write a letter the hotel manager to inform him/her of your problem. In the letter, you should: Describe the item Say why it is important that you get the item back Tell the manager what you would like him/her to do

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Dear smith, I am writing to request you to find and send my solitaire ring which I put
it
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in our room, the number 22, when we were in your hotel for the Christmas holiday. On January 12, my husband and I were rushing. At 1 pm we gave the room's card to the
reception
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. Unfortunately, my solitaire ring which has a
3 carat
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 yellow diamond in the middle
of
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and 10
0.5 carat
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0.5-carat
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 white diamonds around it, has been left on the table beside the wash basin.
this
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 ring is
my
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 wedding ring that my husband gave me in the church and it's very precious to me and a symbol of our love
as well as
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 it's countless because of its yellow diamond which is rare in the world,
also
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 is a legacy that has been inherited to my husband after 5
generation
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 and he gave it to me. I am sure you can understand what it means to us. I will be very grateful if you post it to my address, unit 1, No. 409,
Dr moien
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Dr. Moien
 Blvd., Astane, Iran. yours sincerely Vida Shojaee

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greeting and closing
Ensure that your letter has a proper salutation and closing. Use 'Dear [Hotel Manager's Name]' or 'Dear Hotel Manager' if the name is unknown, and close with 'Yours faithfully' or 'Yours sincerely' followed by your full name.
logical structure
Organize your ideas clearly into separate paragraphs. Each paragraph should cover a distinct aspect of the letter's purpose. For example, one paragraph for describing the item, another for explaining its importance, and a third for specifying what you would like the manager to do.
logical structure
A clear introduction and a summary/conclusion should be added to the letter to increase its coherence and cohesion.
single idea per paragraph
Expand on the explanation of why the item is valuable by providing more personal details or memories associated with the item to strengthen the emotional appeal of the request.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter should remain polite and formal throughout to ensure it is appropriate for the given task. Avoid overly casual language or abbreviations.
complete response
Address all parts of the task by including specific details about the item and its significance, as well as clear instructions on what action you would like the manager to take.
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