Climate change is one of the biggest environmental problems of the 21st century. Some people think that humans should stop using oil, gas and coal and switch to alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others claim that fossil fuels are essential for many industries, and not using them will result in economic recession.

It is a general opinion that the cause of natural pollution is
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result of using oil, gas and coal. Others believe that these materials are of great benefit to many co-operations and
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withdrawal will cause an economic recession. The use of these elements
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been used to make the lives of humans easier. it is being used to produce things like
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, cars, and computers and these things have allowed for an easier pattern of life all over the world.
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an aeroplane is a fast method for moving
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one place to the other, before now people spend days or
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travelling to see families or for a business transaction.
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can bring about minimal damage to the environment. They are
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and can be produced with
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materials. that can be easily bought without wind turbines
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create
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of years without minimum
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have brought about the improvement of our lives as humans. using
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of
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would cause lesser pollution and can be used for
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years with minimal damage. in my opinion, fossil fuels can be used only when strictly necessary, but other energy should be
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of the time as these sources can do the same work with little
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