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the diagrams below show the changes that has taken place in a village park

the diagrams below show the changes that has taken place in a village park
#diagrams #show #changes #place #village #park
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The pictures
illustrates
Change the verb form
illustrate
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 the changes which have taken in a
village
Use synonyms
park
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 within 10 years.
Overall
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, the
village
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park
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 witnessed
a remarkable changes
Correct the article-noun agreement
remarkable changes
a remarkable change
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 and became much more modern.
However
Linking Words
,
a
Correct article usage
the
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 location of the buildings
as
Correct your spelling
was
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same
Correct article usage
the same
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 as 10 years ago. In
details
Fix the agreement mistake
detail
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,
an
Correct article usage
the
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 entrance of the
village
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park
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still
Add a missing verb
is still
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 in the same position , but around
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village
Correct article usage
the village
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park
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 a path for
the
Correct article usage
apply
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cycling has been constructed.
In addition
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, the tennis court
is
Verb problem
has
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 experienced
double
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a double
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 increase in it is courts.The football pitch and car
park
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 have been expanded, particularly the car
park
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 now can accommodate up
50
Change preposition
to 50
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 cars
instead
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 of 20.
Moreover
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, the woods have been knocked down and replaced with new facilities
as
Correct quantifier usage
such as
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 the toilet and cafe. The
children
Change noun form
children's
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 play area
is
Wrong verb form
has been
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 expanded and it has been divided into two areas
such
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 as a
children
Change noun form
children's
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 play area and
Correct article usage
a children
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children
Change noun form
children's
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 soft play area.
Finally
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, a pond has been developed as the boating place and a
total
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totally
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 new picnic zone built.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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