You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The first picture provides information about the
number
of citizens visiting
country
X
from different parts of the nation from 2007 to 2008 and the second pictures show the annual
income
of average businesses in
country
X
between 2019 and 2020.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an
increase
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number
of foreign tourists from China and Japan over the period. Meanwhile,
hotel
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hotels
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and
resort
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resorts
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experienced high
income
in the
tourism
industry. First and foremost,
the
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apply
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visitors from China and Japan were the highest
of
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apply
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tourism
in
country
X
and it began at 3,000 in 2007 and fell dramatically to 2,000 in 2008.
Moreover
,
in
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at
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the beginning of the period the
number
of
citizen
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citizens
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from Australia visiting
country
X
accountend
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accounted
at around 2,500
while
in 2008 saw
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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fall to under than the
last
year.
Whereas
,
in
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Europe had
the
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a
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similarity
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similar
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number
of
visitours
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visitors
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from
US
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the US
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and Canada stood at approximately 2,000 but dropped to below 1,000 in 2008.
On the other hand
, there was a large
income
in
country
X
from the hotel and
tourism
industry by 3.5 million
than
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more than
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the other sectors in 2019.
However
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in 2020, the monthly
income
for
all
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apply
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the
tourism
industry
was
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decreased to under 1.1 million,
specially
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especially
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for
transportasi
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transportation
and travel agents at approximately 0.4 million.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, country, x, income, tourism with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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