During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible Job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter • remind him when and where you met • tell him what kind of Job youaare inter,sted in • say why you think you would be suitable for the Job
Dear Suresh,
I am writing
this
letter to express my intesrest
Correct your spelling
interest
to join
your Shiv Sagar Change preposition
in joining
Resataurant
Correct your spelling
Restaurant
at
Change preposition
in
pune
as a chief cook.
It was a great time to travel with you from Change the capitalization
Pune
pune
to Banglore flight on Friday Change the capitalization
Pune
last
week. Because I got an upgradation
in flight , I was able to get Correct your spelling
upgrade
seat
near to you. The journey with you was a nice Add an article
a seat
experince
especially our talk on Correct your spelling
experience
the
fusion food, where you appreciated my idea of mixingCorrect article usage
apply
spanish
pasta with south Change the capitalization
Spanish
indian
Change the capitalization
Indian
doasa
. Correct your spelling
dosa
does
Also
I was very fortunate to get an offer from you to connect for Add a comma
Also,
suitable
job Correct article usage
a suitable
Correct pronoun usage
that interested
interested
Replace the word
interests
to
me.
Change preposition
apply
Although
I can manage restaurants well, I want to work as cook
in your restaurant Correct article usage
a cook
at
Pune . Change preposition
in
Hence
, I can enjoy the job along with
my earnings.
As I indicated while
travelling I am passionate about cooking and would like to continue my carrier
for the same. SinceCorrect your spelling
career
,
I have completed the diploma in cooking recently , I can better fit as a cook. Remove the comma
apply
Moreover
, I believe I can bring innovative idea
in making food and combo, which can help to improve the Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
buisiness
.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
RajeshCorrect your spelling
business
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Spelling
Ensure accurate spelling of words (e.g., 'intesrest' should be 'interest', 'Resataurant' should be 'Restaurant', 'Banglore' should be 'Bangalore', 'doasa' should be 'dosa', 'upgradation' is not a word, use 'upgrade' instead, 'chef' not 'chief' cook, 'carrier' should be 'career').
Punctuation
Use proper punctuation and sentence separation to enhance the clarity of your ideas (consider revising the run-on sentences and comma usage).
Tone
Maintain a consistent and professional tone throughout the letter suitable for the context of a job application.
Paragraphing
Structure your letter with clear paragraphs, each containing a single idea, and use linking words to connect sentences smoothly.
Purpose
Clearly state your purpose early in the letter. A brief introduction reminding the reader of where you met is good, but the main intent should be clear in the first paragraph.
Format
Correctly format the letter with a suitable greeting (use 'Dear Mr. [Last Name],' if you know the businessman's last name) and closing (e.g., 'Yours faithfully,' if you do not know the name; 'Yours sincerely,' if you do).
Content
Provide specific examples or experiences to support why you would be suitable for the job, instead of making general statements.
Consistency
Address the recipient with proper titles and check for consistent and correct use of names ('Suresh' is mentioned without a title, and then the closing is 'Yours sincerely,' which should match with the recipient's full name).
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.