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You have been teaching English in Vietnam. Your contract with the university is to terminate and you want to continue teaching in Ho Chi Minh City. Write to a university to seek a position. In your letter: - Introduce yourself - Explain what experience and special skills you have - Explain why you are interested in the job

#english #vietnam #contract #university #chi #minh #city #position #skills #job
Dear
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/madam, I am writing
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 same profession , which
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 have been doing for 5 years, but the place where
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 have been now,
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 have to leave
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according to
 the terms of my contract. My name is Lisa
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and
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 got hired
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vietnam
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Vietnam
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 alma mater as an
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 teacher , but
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 want to pursue the same skill at
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 university because
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 have been
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fulfilling
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 all the requirements which you
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 as a good mentor. First of all,
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 am an extrovert personality and
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 taught so many students at different institutes for many years. I always try to immerse pupils in study by using some practical ways to keep them physically and mentally aware. Teaching
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 my passion since my adult age,
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 time short span of time,
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 polished my skills.
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 love to teach students and provide abundant
knowlwdge reagrding evry
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knowledge regarding every
 domain. Yours faithfully, Riza
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task achievement
Ensure that the introduction clearly states your purpose and background related to the job application without ambiguity.
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Expand on your experience with specific examples, also mentioning any qualifications to support your suitability for the job.
coherence cohesion
Clearly structure your letter with separate paragraphs for the introduction, experience and skills, and the reason for your interest in the new job.
coherence cohesion
Use a formal greeting and closing appropriate for a job application letter.
coherence cohesion
Maintain focus within paragraphs; each should represent a single idea or aspect of your application.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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