The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The bar chart illustrates the volume of spare
time
enjoyed by males and females of 5 different categories employment
from 1998 to 1999.
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of employment
Overall
, it is evident that the data of employed part
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part-time
time
and housewives just shown in women.However
, the amount of free time
that men enjoyed was higher than woman
in 3 categories, namely employed Fix the agreement mistake
women
full
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full-time
time
, unemployed and retired.
In order to employed
full Add a missing verb
be employed
time
, males had modestly more leisure time
than female
, with roughly 45 Fix the agreement mistake
females
hours
of spare time
on a weekly basic
,Correct your spelling
basis
while
accounted for under 40 hours
in females. In addition
,the figures for unemployed
shared a similar number of Correct article usage
the unemployed
hours
of leisure time
to that in
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of
retired
, at approximately 85 and 75 Correct article usage
the retired
hours
of free time
per week, respectively.
Housewives and employed part
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part-time
time
in
women Change preposition
apply
are
enjoyed about 50 and 40 Unnecessary verb
apply
hours
respectively in
free Change preposition
of
time
in a week and no data for these sector
is given for men in the graph.Change the determiner
this sector
these sectors
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