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The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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as we see the chart illustrate the percentage of woman and men
teachers
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 in 6 different
type
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types
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 of educational schools
which
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apply
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presented
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were presented
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 by
UK
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the UK
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 in 2020. In nursery
pre-school
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preschool
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 female
teachers
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 cantaining near 90% of the
teachers
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, it is the same situation in primary school.
On the other hand
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,
chart
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the chart
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 shows that the teaching responsibility was divided in half between male and female
teachers
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 in college . In the the secondary school
near
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nearly
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 55% of the
teachers
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 were women and the rest
comes
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came
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to
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from
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 the
men
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male
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teachers
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. In privet training
institudes
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institutes
near
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nearly
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 60% of trainers are men
also
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,
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the university
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university
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universities
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used
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use
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 male
teachers
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 40% more than women trainers.
Overall
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 , using male or female
teachers
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 depends on the major you want to teach and the age rate of the
institude's
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institution's
student
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students
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 which in my opinion
this
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 chart clear that the UK did well
about
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apply
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it
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apply
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • educational settings
  • primary
  • secondary
  • tertiary
  • adult education
  • vocational training
  • private tutoring
  • disparity
  • dominate
  • majority
  • minority
  • gender distribution
  • workforce
  • trend
  • ratio
  • comparative analysis
  • significant difference
  • visual representation
  • data interpretation
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