The diagrams depict the scheme of development for Youngsvillie’s town in New Zealand between 1980 and 2005.

The diagrams depict the scheme of development for Youngsvillie’s town in New Zealand between 1980 and 2005.
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representations of developmental changes made to the city of Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from 1980.
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, the city became more industrialised and well-suited to commercial activities with fewer trees
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residential housing and more business-oriented infrastructure. From the railway station and to the left of the city following a path , one can be led through a line of 5 houses up north ,
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was replaced with a continuous railway line which ran up north , a parking space and a stadium. On the left side ,where a hospital was erected, and a pond was reserved for leisure
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surrounded by a number
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, the layout changed in 2005 where some of the greenery became a park and the body of water was common for various water sports. Below River Alanah, the space which was once for housing soon had more warehouses and
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. As for the woodlands close to the airports to the far left lower corner, factories were constructed and the trees were cleared.

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