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the graph below shows average carbon dioxide(co2) emission per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden,Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide(co2) emission per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden,Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2) emissions per capita in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. The average
number
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 of individual CO2 emissions in Italy and Portugal witnessed annual steady growth throughout the
period
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 given.
Meanwhile
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 in the United Kingdom and Portugal, each person's average CO2 emissions
number
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 generally experienced downward trends. In 1967, people in the United Kingdom produced just above 10
tons
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carbon
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dioxide
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in
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 average.
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, the
number
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 gradually declined throughout the
period
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 given to more or less 8
tons
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 in 2007. As for Sweden, the
carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2) average
number
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 rose steeply between 1967 and 1977 from around 8
tons
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 to 10
tons
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.
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, it fell dramatically
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 the rest of the given
period
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 at approximately 5
tons
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 in 2007. In Italy, individual average
carbon
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dioxide
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 began at 4
tons
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 in 1967. The
number
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 rose steeply between 1967 and 1977 to around 6
tons
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 and went up gradually for the remainder of the
period
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. As for Portugal, the
number
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 grew steadily from about a ton to around 3
tons
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between 1967 and 1987. The
number
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 rose significantly from 1987 to 1997 reaching approximately 5
tons
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 and stayed at that level until the final decade of the
period
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 given.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, co, number, period, tons with synonyms.
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