IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daility activities

The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daility activities
#information #hours #minutes #uk #males #females #daility #activities
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The table shows data on annual
time
Use synonyms
 for
leisure
Use synonyms
 and productive
activities
Use synonyms
 in the UK based on two categories
such
Linking Words
 as
males
Use synonyms
 and females. In general, we can see that information has the highest proportions for
males
Use synonyms
 and females are sleep for
leisure
Use synonyms
activities
Use synonyms
.
In contrast
Linking Words
, they are using a lot of
time
Use synonyms
 for productivity
activities
Use synonyms
 on Employment and study. Regarding several
leisure
Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
activities
Use synonyms
, we can see that
males
Use synonyms
 prefer to spend
time
Use synonyms
 watching TV/DVD and listening to radio/music,
whereas
Linking Words
 the men spend
time
Use synonyms
 2
hours
Use synonyms
 50
minutes
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the total
leisure
Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
 for men is higher than for women, which is the
time
Use synonyms
 for all
leisure
Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
 is 5
hours
Use synonyms
 25
minutes
Use synonyms
 and 4
hours
Use synonyms
 53
minutes
Use synonyms
, respectively. In terms of productive
activities
Use synonyms
 by UK men and women, the
males
Use synonyms
 spend a lot of
time
Use synonyms
 on employment and study,
while
Linking Words
 the
males
Use synonyms
 spend 3
hours
Use synonyms
 45
minutes
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the females have to allocate
time
Use synonyms
 for housework, which needs 3
hours
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, leisure, activities, males, hours, minutes with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: