he line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

he line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The line graph illustrates the number of
books
that were rented between June and September
in
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2014 from four village
libraries
,
while
the pie chart gives data on the percentage, by genre, in
four-month
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period. Generally,
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numer
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number
of borrowed
books
fluctuated during
this
time and fiction was more popular than the other types. As
it
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presented, the highest number of borrowed
books
was 300, from Ryeslip in June
,
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2014. With 250 rents, Sutton Wood
library
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stood as the second highest lender at that time. West Eaton and Church Mount
libraries
gave 50
books
in June. Ryeslip
libraries
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number of borrowed
books
gradually decreased
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the
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time and reached
to
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150. Sutton Wood,
on the contrary
,
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went higher to make it almost double than the other three
libraries
. Over the months, the
books
borrowed from West Eaton and Church Mount increased to having a similar index, which equals
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150 in September. Fiction type of
books
were
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the most borrowed genre, more than 40%.
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ratio for history and science
books
accounted for 14% each and that was 5% lower than that of biology
books
. Self-help
books
’ borrowing ratio was exactly 10% which indicated one in ten
books
borrowed had
this
genre.
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