The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The two bar charts give information about 4 distinct types of activity except full-time
work
, which
taken
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by UK graduate and postgraduate
students
after graduation in 2008. At a glance, both graduate and postgraduate
students
in
UK
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the UK
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preferred to pursue their studies after leaving college, whilst the minority in both
students
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student's
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level
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levels
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were on
the
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voluntary
works
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work
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. In regard to the UK graduate
students
, the highest number was 29, 665 people, who decided to continue their study to the next level.
Next,
the second and third
position
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were part-time
work
and unemployment, which were experienced by 17,735 and 16,235
students
respectively. Following that, the 3,500
of
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students
opted to be volunteers. In terms of what postgraduate
students
did after done their college, there were two preferable destinations: pursuing their studies and
work in
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working
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part time
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. The former number
was
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stood at 2,725 people and the latter was 2,535 people.
Subsequently
, 1,625 postgraduate
students
became unemployed after
finish
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their
study
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studies
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.
Lastly
, the lowest option
from
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these
students
was
work
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as a volunteer, which was only 345 of them.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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